Journal Entry - Spider-Man
On a cloudy day, After trapping Spider Man inside the cold water tank, Vulture is planning to carry out the second step of his evil master plan. Inside of the water tank, the shock of hitting the cold water revives Spider man's power. Spider man tries to to shoot his web towards the top but his ejector is empty because he forgot to refill it since the last time he used it. He thinks of the idea of climbing up, but the wall is too wet and slippery for him to get a toehold on. Time passes by and the water level is elevating up to his nose. If Spider man does not think of another idea soon, he would be drown and suffocate. While sinking in the deep water, Spider man is still trying to figure out a way to get out.
I like your summary because it states all the main tpoics.
ReplyDeleteYour summary is short, and to the point. You did not lack great details and descriptions though. For instance, when you said, "...the shock of hitting the cold water revives Spider man's power"(sentence 2), you made the image of the scene a lot stronger in my head. The only thing I could say is to pay just a little more attention on grammar. Though you have most of it perfect. Overall, it was a nice piece to read.
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